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Technical Style Exercise<\/strong><\/h2>\n\n
In this slide module, students apply style guidelines as they answer a few questions and revise poor writing style examples to demonstrate knowledge and application of business writing style skills. The exercises were collected and adapted from Technical Writing: Elements of Style; Style Exercises for Technical Writers; Characteristics of Good Writing; Business Communication Essentials 4th Edition; Business Communication, Process and Product.<\/p>\n\n
Instructions: <\/strong><\/p>\n\n
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Use the navigation tools on the bottom to scroll through the slides. The module may be enlarged.<\/li>\n\t
Type the revisions and answer the questions in the space provided.<\/li>\n\t
On the last slide, click on the \"Save File to your Device\" button to save your responses as a DOC file on your device.
\n\tNote: Responses will not be saved if you miss this step. Verify the file before you close this module.<\/li>\n\t
Rename the file (check our course requirements) and click on the assignment title to submit the file.<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n\n
Get started! Type your name, student number, and course code and section in the space provided and click on the next slide.<\/strong><\/p>\n"},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"6ffa0605-5bd4-46df-9e21-04885407e40e"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":96.77419354838709,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n\n
Be Clear and Concise<\/h3>\n\n
Style topics for these exercises include Sentence Structure, Noun Strings, Main Subject and Verb, Nominalizations, Wordy Phrases and Jargon, False Expletives, Active and Passive Voice, Gender, Clarity, Conciseness, and Tone, Sentence and Paragraph Organization and Flow, Parallelism in Sentences and Vertical Lists.<\/p>\n\n
Read the given sentence or paragraph and revise it to into clear and concise content. Revisions avoid grammar and mechanical errors; place the subject and verb at the start of the sentence; consider voice, tone and word choice; replace wordy phrases; avoid false expletives, redundancy, and nominalization; apply the given-new principle to improve readability, and more!<\/p>\n\n
To start, review the revision for this sentence.
\nPoor Example: <\/strong>Every 250 years, Pluto completes it\u2019s orbit around the sun
\nRevision:<\/strong> Pluto completes its orbit around the sun every 250 years.<\/p>\n\n
Identify the corrections made in the revision, and suggest one more revision and why: \n\n <\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"8e91af84-df85-4033-8e6b-3755794aa990"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0832549019607842,"y":1.061862365591398,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":43.01075268817204,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"index":0,"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n\n
Use Correct Sentence Structure<\/h3>\n\n
1. Because you will be entering a fast-paced, competitive, and highly connected digital environment. Communication and technology skills are critical to your career success.<\/p>\n\n
Revision creates a connected single sentence and places the subject and verb at the start of the sentence: \n\n <\/p>\n"},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"5c862dbd-0064-48cb-85b4-9e3ff662bd86"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":45.16129032258064,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":25.806451612903224,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
2. Ethics is a hot topic and trend in the workplace, however making ethical decisions is not always easy.<\/p>\n\n
Revision eliminates the run-on sentence:<\/p>\n","index":1},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"0efdfe68-7d90-4e00-8849-18772696d613"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":72.47311827956989,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":25.806451612903224,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n\n
3. Discounts up to 40 percent were offered yet sales targets were not met for the holiday long weekend.<\/p>\n\n
Revision corrects the misplaced modifier and connects the discount and the holiday occurrence:<\/p>\n","index":3},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"4d88811c-1a9d-4ce5-ae63-c4ab262f5107"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.8602150537634408,"width":97.05882352941177,"height":25.806451612903224,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Eliminate Noun Strings: <\/strong>Reduce the number of nouns chained together in a sentence to two or three.<\/p>\n\n
4. Our last task is to write the HR employment manual introduction.<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"e8a4523d-267d-4885-a9c0-2b86b9f4f402"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":29.677419354838708,"width":97.05882352941177,"height":38.70967741935483,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Focus on the Main Subject and Verb: <\/strong>Place subjects and verbs at the start of a sentence and focus on the main clause.<\/p>\n\n
5. After reviewing the growth of the Calgary office, it was decided by the corporate staff than an additional lab should be constructed.<\/p>\n","index":1},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"c626be6a-b86c-41ef-9edb-4a40ac5ba49b"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":70.53763440860214,"width":96.94989106753813,"height":27.956989247311824,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
6. The hiring committee planned to interview Jim Steinway today, but bad weather delayed his plane departure, and the committee had to reschedule the interview to tomorrow.<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"13832989-879d-4c06-9901-8f04fd398f49"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":45.10387096774194,"width":97.05882352941177,"height":21.50537634408602,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
8. The report makes a recommendation that we develop our social media presence.<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"074ffd76-f885-420c-9c6e-ad296b452a62"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.8602150537634408,"width":96.94989106753813,"height":40.86021505376344,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
Avoid Nominalizations<\/h3>\n\n
Look for the real verb that may appear as a noun. Convert that noun to its verb form.<\/p>\n\n
7. The acquisition of the property was accomplished through long negotiations.<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"da383389-2dd4-4a7c-ab10-722baabaef51"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":70.83870967741936,"width":96.94989106753813,"height":21.50537634408602,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
9. The approval of the project plan was given by the team leader on Friday.<\/p>\n","index":3},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"0945601a-38bc-4f8d-86fd-61f717302507"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":47.74193548387096,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":21.50537634408602,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
11. <\/strong>Look for the sinkhole in the proximity of the north-west corner.<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"02ceacdc-69a7-42a2-839f-62fc58d3ada7"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.8602150537634408,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":40.86021505376344,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Shorten Wordy Phrases and Eliminate Jargon<\/h3>\n\n
Replace wordy phrases and misused or unnecessary jargon with shorter simpler alternatives.<\/p>\n\n
10. We will patent the process due to the fact that we developed the technique.<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"39414e44-7f74-4823-825f-d7b1dc9f8cb8"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":74.53763440860216,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":21.50537634408602,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
12. The manager is authorized to approve vacation requests at the present time.<\/p>\n","index":3},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"f314f90a-a8c8-4961-8a29-3116bd41fc30"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.8602150537634408,"width":98.14814814814815,"height":45.16129032258064,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Avoid False Expletives (weak sentence starts)<\/strong><\/h3>\n\n
Avoid using false expletives like \u201cthere are\u201d, and \u201cit is\u201d. Avoid using \u201cthis\u201d as the subject unless a noun follows it, for example, \u201cThis fire extinguisher has a C rating\u201d.<\/p>\n\n
13. There are many projects that could be considered for design awards.<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"f6d11060-b752-4542-be06-99e359a52a96"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":50.32258064516129,"width":98.14814814814815,"height":21.50537634408602,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
14. It is difficult to establish a cost per square foot for this system.<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"5d296d0d-0949-4fad-96a5-eb278e8d2d04"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0862298474945535,"y":75.17096774193548,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":21.50537634408602,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n\n
15. It is clear to the hiring committee that writing skills are important.<\/p>\n","index":3},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"f4778232-bc80-472b-9a9f-e996496436bd"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"slideBackgroundSelector":{},"elements":[{"x":1.0847570806100217,"y":1.061862365591398,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":96.77419354838709,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"index":0,"label":"\n\n
Follow Active and Passive Voice Guidelines<\/strong><\/h3>\n\n
Use active voice:<\/p>\n\n
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to emphasize who is responsible for the action \u2013 The vice-president approved the agenda.<\/li>\n\t
to place the action first \u2013 Figure 1 shows the values.<\/li>\n\t
to write shorter sentences.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n
Use passive voice: <\/p>\n\n
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to emphasize the receiver of the action \u2013 Test samples will be sent.<\/li>\n\t
to emphasize the action itself \u2013 The documents were delivered.<\/li>\n\t
to avoid \u201cI\u201d and \u201cwe\u201d.<\/li>\n\t
when responsibility is obvious \u2013 Students are required to take courses.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n
16. Answer this question: Which is the preferred voice in business and technical communication and why? Share a benefit not listed here in your answer.<\/strong> \n\n <\/p>\n"},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"45850549-498b-492e-9d10-4510ea889411"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}]},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.8602150537634408,"width":98.14814814814815,"height":24.516129032258064,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
Use the Right Voice: <\/strong>Change active voice to passive voice and passive voice to active voice.<\/p>\n\n
17. Passive voice: The project plan was written to ensure the project\u2019s success.<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"f18e3e4a-efa1-4e18-92d7-827b11938316"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":27.956989247311824,"width":98.25708061002179,"height":16.129032258064516,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
18. Active voice: Maria did not send the files so we could not complete the report.<\/p>\n","index":1},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"cee52ae2-557d-451d-8cae-44304875660b"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":45.16129032258064,"width":98.25708061002179,"height":24.731182795698924,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
Use Gender-neutral Language: <\/strong>Eliminate male\/female references.<\/p>\n\n
19. The payables clerk sends her cheques to the manager for his approval.<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"91fac820-73cd-4336-816e-afea56cf477a"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":0.8714596949891068,"y":71.61290322580645,"width":98.25708061002179,"height":25.806451612903224,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Use a Positive Tone:<\/strong> Adopt an affirmative approach for your audience. Avoid negative tones and \u201cno\u201d.<\/p>\n\n
20. If you do not submit the signed form by the deadline, a service call will not be scheduled.<\/p>\n","index":3},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"0d780d58-e8b6-4e1e-95c8-eb2215a58757"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":1.075268817204301,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":51.61290322580645,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Be Clear and Concise<\/h3>\n\n
Consider all of the skills covered to clean up these sentences and place the subject and verb at the start of the sentence; consider voice, tone, and word choice; replace wordy phrases; avoid false expletives, redundancy, and nominalization; eliminate grammar and mechanical errors; and something new - verify date and symbol formats!<\/p>\n\n
21. Natural disasters occur in nature and those include hurricanes, tornados, and floods, which are likely events that lead to a surge in insurance claims.<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"dbf2724b-1147-449c-b097-a24b8038a7e2"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":55.91397849462365,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":19.354838709677416,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
22. We produced a small (choose: amount, number) of cars this year, even (choose: fewer, less) than last year.<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"f3659522-49de-4ac6-9f63-b02fd15c89e4"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0862298474945535,"y":77.32150537634409,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":19.354838709677416,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
23. <\/strong>In the financial quarter ending June 30th this year ABC Inc reported a five % increase in it\u2019s profits<\/p>\n","index":3},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"c116d621-2aff-4197-9399-3152c720fea7"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":55.91397849462365,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":43.01075268817204,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n\n
25. Given the fact that more and more employees are using and sharing confidential information on mobile devices such as tablets and smartphones, there is a growing trend that proprietary information is increasingly compromised due to lost or stolen mobile devices than there is to any actual hacking.<\/p>\n\n
Revision:<\/p>\n","index":1},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"085d1eae-9b10-4f9e-80ab-408cc5f31766"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":1.075268817204301,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":51.61290322580645,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"\n
Be Clear and Concise (continued)<\/strong><\/h3>\n\n
24. While it is true that many international consumer electronics manufacturers will add Netflix buttons to their remote controls for the North American market, it is a fact that there may be severe monthly bandwidth limitations imposed on Canadian consumers.<\/p>\n\n
Revision:<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"543eb514-d4c9-4e12-88f5-6f9b35178fa6"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""}],"slideBackgroundSelector":{}},{"elements":[{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.6451612903225806,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":94.62365591397848,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Organize Sentences and Paragraphs to Create Flow<\/h3>\n\n
With the subject placed at the start of a sentence, the verb follows, and then comes the object \u2013 the completion of the thought \u2013 that delivers the important or new information at the end. Write sentences with varied length and effective organization and flow to help maintain reader interest.<\/p>\n\n
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Combine sentences to create flow and connections and reduce unwanted repetition.<\/li>\n\t
Reinforce connections with the given-new rule\/principle, where you express the known information (given) before previously unkown information (new) in the first sentence and repeat a keyword or idea for that new information near the start of the next sentence.<\/li>\n\t
Create flow between sentences with transitional expressions like therefore, consequently, then, first, next, after, however, since, although, and as a result, that make connections and improve message decoding.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n
Hint: For these exercises, keep the first sentence and revise the ones that follow.<\/p>\n\n
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26. Corporate Social Responsibility may have economic benefits. It is a voluntary activity.<\/p>\n\n
Revised sentence that creates a connection:<\/p>\n","index":0},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"583fec73-a4ee-42e2-baa4-0aef149bafb5"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":"\n
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28. The Human Resources department is developing a plan to increase employee retention. Three employees resigned from the accounting department last month. We had to hire temporary staff to fill the positions until new accounting staff could be hired. Many important accounting tasks went unfinished. Employee retention has become a top priority for Human Resources.<\/p>\n\n
Revised cohesive paragraph:<\/p>\n","index":2},"metadata":{"contentType":"Exportable Text Area","license":"U","title":"Untitled Exportable Text Area"},"subContentId":"31aca906-b209-43e5-8074-a1ad9a2fc309"},"alwaysDisplayComments":false,"backgroundOpacity":0,"displayAsButton":false,"buttonSize":"big","goToSlideType":"specified","invisible":false,"solution":""},{"x":1.0893246187363834,"y":0.6451612903225806,"width":98.03921568627452,"height":47.31182795698924,"action":{"library":"H5P.ExportableTextArea 1.3","params":{"exportNotSupported":"Export not supported on your device","exportComments":false,"label":"
Organize Sentences and Paragraphs to Create Flow (continued)<\/h3>\n\n
27. Social media have given customers and other stakeholders a voice they did not have in the past, and businesses are listening. Monitoring online discussions about their company and its brands is one of the most common uses among businesses.<\/p>\n\n
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30. The helpline accepts calls for technical assistance, installing hardware, and software glitches.<\/p>\n\n
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Proofread for Parallelism in Sentences<\/h3>\n\n
Ensure that sentences and lists have parallel structure\/form (same grammatical form) for a series of words or phrases, including nouns, verbs, adjectives, or adverbs.<\/p>\n\n
29. Financial planners assess financial needs, help with investments, and insurance decisions.<\/p>\n\n
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Proofread for Parallelism in Vertical Lists<\/h3>\n\n
Rewrite this list and ensure that list items are parallel in form.<\/p>\n\n
How to start a project:
\n\u2022 selection of the team and topic
\n\u2022 define the purpose, audience, and scope then summarizing of the tasks
\n\u2022 library research
\n\u2022 questions asked
\n\u2022 project plan writing<\/p>\n\n
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Reflect on the Module Exercises<\/h3>\n\n
Congratulations, you completed the revisions on these skills for business and technical style writing:<\/p>\n\n
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Sentence Structure<\/li>\n\t
Noun Strings<\/li>\n\t
Main Subject and Verb <\/li>\n\t
Nominalizations<\/li>\n\t
Wordy Phrases and Jargon<\/li>\n\t
False Expletives<\/li>\n\t
Active and Passive Voice<\/li>\n\t
Gender<\/li>\n\t
Clarity, Conciseness and Tone<\/li>\n\t
Sentence and Paragraph Flow and Organization<\/li>\n\t
Parallelism in Sentences and Vertical Lists<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n
To complete the exercise, reflect on your skills and what you learned by completing the module.
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Reflect on the Module Exercises (continued)<\/h3>\n\n
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Technical Style Exercise

Gail Harris